Hello!
I revised my professional summary on my resume and I would like your feedback. Please let me know what I should change.
Thank you!
Professional Summary
Results-Driven Employee Relations Consultant with 6 years of experience in administration of leaves of absences, disabilities accommodations, and advocating for employees by creating and administering affirmative action and employee relations programs, resulting in reduced risk and compliance. Top-performing leader with expertise in performance management, conflict resolution, and employee relations. Demonstrate expertise in analyzing employees' data, participating in the recruitment and exit process, managing their relationships, and providing recommendations for resolution. Strategic business partner with demonstrated success in building relationships and partnerships with all employees and collaborating with senior leadership.
Anonymous
08/10/22 at 12:55PM UTC (Edited)
I disagree that the profile summary is just for Linkedin, but this one is a bit long for a CV.
I would do a few things:
1. Make it less wordy - it's not easy to read when there are so many lists within lists, and it's for the CV so it needs to be concise.
2. Make it more personable - "I do this; I am this" - it's very impersonal and cold, which doesn't totally give off the impression of excellent employee relations.
3. Focus on the how rather than the what - everyone in your field at your level will have the same skills, what sets you apart?
For example, (and this is a very poor example, because I don't know you or employee relations management, but hopefully you get the gist!) you might go with something more like:
"I am a results-driven employee relations consultant who improves compliance and reduces risk. With my positive attitude and quick thinking, I am adept at building relationships with employees and senior leadership alike. Being data-driven, I develop improvements to the full employee relations workflow to ensure better business practices."
Joanna Giordano
HBO HR experience. Resume/Job & Health coach.
358
09/16/22 at 4:44PM UTC
agree on 1&3!
re: #2: a resume does not require complete sentences. they're a waste of space IME.
Anonymous
08/09/22 at 11:33AM UTC
I like it. It flows pretty well. There are only two things I would suggest changing. "Demonstrate expertise" to Demonstrated / Proven expertise. The other is with "demonstrated success" to with a high degree of success / proven success / a successful track record. Trying to break up the repetitive use of "demonstrate" so closely together.
Joanna GiordanoHBO HR experience. Resume/Job & Health coach.
358
09/16/22 at 4:45PM UTC
agree! the verbs are not aligned in their inflection and tense. pick one and go with it.
Anonymous
08/09/22 at 3:16PM UTC
Thank you!
User deleted comment on 08/09/22 at 3:16PM UTC
Becca A.Technical Coordinator
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08/09/22 at 10:52AM UTC
save the profile summary for your LinkedIn page or elevator pitch during interviews. As no one includes profile summaries to their resume anymore.
In place of the profile summary list your key skills as highlights so prospective employers will know the skills you will be adding to their company that they desire.
Joanna GiordanoHBO HR experience. Resume/Job & Health coach.
358
09/16/22 at 4:47PM UTC
conditional disagree. A profile or summary can be very valuable at the nutshell for the resume. Especially if you are a pivoter. Be sure to tailor the resume and the years, words, order of attributes to the role for which you will use this version.
And yes, agree. Summaries are also great for LI profiles.
Anonymous
08/09/22 at 3:17PM UTC
Thank you!
