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Resume Comparison
One resume is the original one I created, cropping out my address and email. The other is the one created by Leet Resume, redacting my address and email. Which do you prefer? https://photos.app.goo.gl/wZbeDHwcxowjdzKGA
Tahlora, VP Finance and Administration Shattering the glass ceiling -Silicon Valley, CA
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10/25/21 at 6:24AM UTC
I would honestly pass on both, neither shows achievements in a way that would interest a hiring manager.
Use this type of guidance to put together action- and achievement- oriented statements that really sell yourself.
How was each company affected, improved, and what did you accomplish at each job? Future employers want to know WHY to invest in you as an employee, you get 1-2 pages to initially grab their interest with the amazing results, attitude and energy you contributed to all your former jobs.
Even a tiny thing- did you even pick up trash in the parking lot that others stepped over (I had a former CEO that did that, and noticed when others did as well- it's pride for the company, and those small things do add up!).
https://careersidekick.com/resume-bullet-examples/
Cassandra SchmigotzkiWellness Coach for Women
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10/25/21 at 1:04PM UTC
It's really hard to know any of that when it's not tracked (if it is we're not told anything about it) or acknowledged. The only thing that I know of that could be potentially fall into this category is at the Y when several members told me that when they walk into the Wellness Center my smile brightened their day.
As far as the tiny things example, we're yelled at for doing them because they consider it someone else's responsibility. That's been the case at multiple jobs.
Anonymous
10/21/21 at 3:40PM UTC
I like the second one.
Elizabeth White-Peters
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10/15/21 at 2:22PM UTC
Interesting how the 2nd includes lines - an ATS no, no.
Cassandra SchmigotzkiWellness Coach for Women
833
10/15/21 at 7:33PM UTC
Really? I didn't know that.
Kelly MeigsMarketing is my thing.
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10/15/21 at 12:40PM UTC
The first one! The more I can know about you, the more likely I am to be interested in you.
Alexis GladstoneHelping You Excel as a Leader
2.59k
10/14/21 at 3:25PM UTC
If you're talking format and readability I like the 2nd one. As for content, my first question is what role are you going for? If you're looking to stay in the wellness arena, I would ensure those are all grouped together. And if you want a procurement role I would put that first.
I also like the second one because it lists titles and the bullet points are more results focused. One thought for the procurement roles, do you have any numbers/stats in you can include? For instance, cost savings or customer feedback? It's always good to quantify your results whenever you can.
Cassandra SchmigotzkiWellness Coach for Women
833
10/14/21 at 6:36PM UTC
I don't know what role I want to take on next; I just need out of this toxic workplace. Nobody tracks numbers/stats here so I don't have anything like that to include.
Alexis GladstoneHelping You Excel as a Leader
2.59k
10/15/21 at 1:28PM UTC
You might want to have two versions then. One that puts procurement at the forefront and the other that does the same for wellness. It's just a matter of moving things around in your final version.
Anonymous
10/15/21 at 12:41AM UTC
Cassandra, please be careful using your name and complaining about your workplace in public!
Anonymous
10/14/21 at 1:36PM UTC
I like the second one. It has a good flow and phrases your experiences in a better way.
Anonymous
10/14/21 at 1:15PM UTC
The one containing the title and keywords is best - an executive resume. I'm a client of a placement/coaching firm and this is the format they use.
Jennifer HoweHuman Resources Consultant
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10/14/21 at 2:55AM UTC
I prefer the readability of the second one.
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Joan Williams, Senior Talent Acquisition Specialist
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10/14/21 at 2:51AM UTC
What are you looking to do? Because I cannot tell from either of these resumes - and that's not a good thing.
I don't think I would recommend either of these.
I look at resumes all day long for a living.
Cassandra SchmigotzkiWellness Coach for Women
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10/14/21 at 6:38PM UTC
I have no idea what I want to do next, just that I need out of this toxic work environment.
Joan Williams, Senior Talent Acquisition Specialist
20.5k
10/14/21 at 7:53PM UTC
That's not being very strategic about your job search - I should think you'd want to make sure you don't make a move to wind up in the same situation.
My recommendation would be to have two separate resumes. One for your purchasing and HR Block experience and one for your other experience.
Are you still in the purchasing position? If so, why is all your experience in the past tense? And there is no scope to any of your experience. You mention contracts - are these $4,000 contracts or $5million or $50million contracts? If it's $4,000 you can probably leave that info off.
I cannot think of a position I would move you forward for if you sent me either of those resumes. That's my honest feedback.
Cassandra SchmigotzkiWellness Coach for Women
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10/14/21 at 8:53PM UTC
Yes, I'm still in the purchasing position. I didn't notice they put the experience in past tense. I don't know that we've ever had multi-million dollar contracts; I think that volume would be beyond our capacity.
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